If I were to re-write my midterm assignment, I would keep a lot of the description and literary techniques that I used in the first-half; I think I did a good job of using auditory imagery and onomatopoeia to explain the breakdown I suffered on the train. I also like the way that I used ethos, putting my thoughts in italics to convey my inner voice; this was an attempt to juxtapose reality from what was happening inside of my head.

While I am proud of the first half or so of my midterm assignment, I definitely think that the second half of my work needs editing. As a wordy writer, I sometimes find myself in the predicament in which I exceed the word count- and that is what happened here as well. Due to this, I rushed the ending of my essay and was unable to thoroughly explain my thoughts. In my re-write, I would aim to find a way to express my story and ideas in a more concise way, so that I can feel confident that I conveyed all of my thoughts without rushing or having to give up.